Hi Dave,

Beautiful melody and a nice chord progression, but I honestly think you'll have to experiment a bit more before you have a coherent song here. So sorry to write that because I generally really like your work.

I just think that some of the transitions and timings in this track is a bit off at too many places, which disturbs the listening-experience.

Please don't hate me for saying that!

I believe we all only can get better if we are honest to each other and I would feel like being dishonest to you if I wrote that the track is perfect as it is.

I know you have a huge talent for composing so I just think you have posted this track a bit too early (like I have done myself too many times).

Will