Originally Posted By: Ezekiel's Storm
Such a beautifully ethereal sound in this song. Great lyrics. I especially like this quatrain:
all the rainbow ribbons
momma fastened through her hair
Jenny keeps with daddy`s laugh
like braids through despair

Nicely done!


Thanks for those positive comments!

Originally Posted By: 44kfl
Sad and beautiful song

choice of instruments and overall sound is great

super write, full of emotion and imagery

haunting

enjoyed the listen,

Kenny


Kenny,
I appreciate that. I had this all done and then realized it was too busy at the start -glad I simplified the instrumentation .



Originally Posted By: cliftond
a beautiful and sad write here Robert, so good, emotions are established from the truth of the song. Cliff


Thank you Cliff!

Originally Posted By: MarioD
This is one hell of a great song! Dark and sad, well written, perfect instrumentation and some great vocals.

Poetry so beautifully to music!

This your best to date IMHO.


Mario,
That`s very kind -thanks for your listen and comments.


Originally Posted By: dcuny
I agree with all the prior posters - great song, well done - vocals, arrangement, mix: all good.

But... I'll confess that if you hadn't said the song was about family violence, I wouldn't have been able to figure it out myself. The arc of the story is clear - trauma, with hope at the end. It's just specifics which are fuzzy. For example, is red supposed to refer to blood (which is salty), rage (the fire/water analogy), something else, or all the above?

Sometimes I'm just too darned literal when listening to lyrics, and miss the forest for the trees. blush

Since you said you were trying to paint the broad outlines without specifics, you've succeeded in spades! (No, I'm not being sarcastic).

Nicely done.


David,

In describing how you didn`t get some meanings " For example, is red supposed to refer to blood (which is salty), rage (the fire/water analogy), something else, or all the above?" seems to me you`ve demonstrated that you REALLY understood!
And, yes, all the above meanings intended.
Green will always mean sour to me `cos of all the crab apples I munched on as a kid-the senses get mixed up in our memories.
Thank you for listening so closely and taking the time to comment.

Robert