James...great Christmas song, and a wonderful concept for the lyrics..thank you for making and sharing.

My comments:
Your singing...you should try to sing..I’ll bet you can do much better if you didn’t hold back! Take the suggestions here, especially David’s comments about vowel voicing—and I’m sure you’ll see that you can passably “sing” many of your creations. Go for it! You’re in a very supportive, positive friendship group here...I hope you do this!

Regarding the song itself...only thing I would do is that you have a long-ish pause in the verse melody before the last line of each verse. If it were me, I’d look to “decorate” it with some catchy musical element—maybe a sustained piano chord, or some chimes..not more than a beat, but would give that little expectant pause a small listening treat.

Merry Christmas to you James!


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