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Closer Than A Tattoo Pop Rock nostalgia. RealTracks in song: 1523:Bass, Electric, PowerPop Ev 120 RealTracks in style: 1535:Piano, Acoustic, Rhythm PopPowerPushA-B Ev 120 RealTracks in style: 1526:Guitar, Electric, Rhythm PopPowerPushA-B Ev 120 RealTracks in song 2667 Pedal Steel Background Dreamy RealTracks in song: 1526:Guitar, Electric, Rhythm PopPowerPushA-B Ev 120 RealDrums in song Praise Worship Shine Closer Than A Tattoo all I have is one picture from our summer of love standing on the bridge like you`re reading scripture from the clouds above I like to think it was me put that spark in your eyes of flint pressed the shutter couldn`t breathe knowing you weren`t one to blink train clattering round the bend there`s no full stop at our story`s end a tear of candlewax hides the tree where we sheltered the sun and moon my defences stood no chance when you danced by the river said we`re never going back with our bodies and with ink we`d stitch our fate make it fact an indelible link pulling out to the chains length the best laid plans with all our strength hearts too full hearts too full for our lips to speak if I could choose choose the words a day with you to keep clearer than a picture closer than a tattoo carry my dreams from the attic to the cellar you and me girl in Kodachrome forever hearts too full hearts too full for our lips to speak if I could choose choose the words a day with you to keep clearer than a picture closer than a tattoo © Robert Cordrey Dec. 2018
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Nice write - very evocative. Solid production, well sung. Not my style of melody, but enjoyable nonetheless.
we`d stitch our fate make it fact
Great line.
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The unexpected phrasing of longer lines reminds me of Grant McLennan of the Go-Betweens' solo work.
Your voice becomes more certain and on task as the song progresses.
"Closer than a tattoo" is a very effective image.
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Nice one, Robert! As always a good write.
Over all the vocal sounded good, and the vocal harmonies are very effective.
Nice production also, starting out with just the piano works well, and I like the way you brought in the pedal steel.
Good way to start out the new year!
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Hello Robert,
what a great song title that's a really strong picture.. And a very nice song, too. Enjoyed the listen.
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Robert, interesting and fresh! Great lyrics. Interesting harmony. Almost like punk rock sections were smoothed and slowed down for this  I enjoyed it! Thank you! Misha.
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I enjoyed the lyrics & your vocal delivery of them...
vivid images leading to the hook... Closer Than A Tattoo
I really like that phrase.
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Robert, This is a great piece... I love the feel and the dark undertones. Lots of texture and a very cool set of lyrics. I'm all in on this one. Bob
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Nice write - very evocative. Solid production, well sung. Not my style of melody, but enjoyable nonetheless.
we`d stitch our fate make it fact
Great line.
Thanks for the positives, David. Due to the busy season I got the vocal in 3 takes ( I`m usually I`m in double figures!) so glad you approve of that. Robert
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Enjoyed the song - as always an interesting and clever lyric. Has all the hallmarks of your style and is nicely
produced and written.
Peter
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Great band with lots of dynamics in the arrangement. Very clear mix and that pedal steel with it strong reverb fits perfectly. Nice photographic story.
Janne
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Robert. You got me with the title of this one and it didnt disappoint. Your lyrics are always so well thought out and crafted. Kudos on the production too.
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Robert some really really great imaginary in your lyrics. Beautiful contemplation and memories. Really enjoyed the vocals and melody. Very good song.
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Awesome tune Robert. Loved the way you started the song. Very cool when the band kicked it. Super vocal. Mix was excellent as well
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Robert,
"Closer Than A Tattoo" - One of the most intriguing titles I've ever heard!! Awesome.
And a very interesting write. Very original.
"said we`re never going back
with our bodies and with ink
we`d stitch our fate make it fact
an indelible link"
Strong.
The BAND on this is really nice. A good mix, And your vocal is "confident". One of your best, I think.
I like it.
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The unexpected phrasing of longer lines reminds me of Grant McLennan of the Go-Betweens' solo work.
Your voice becomes more certain and on task as the song progresses.
"Closer than a tattoo" is a very effective image.
Thank you- I`ll have to check out that singer. Nice one, Robert! As always a good write.
Over all the vocal sounded good, and the vocal harmonies are very effective.
Nice production also, starting out with just the piano works well, and I like the way you brought in the pedal steel.
Good way to start out the new year! Dave, I`ve been trying different things to make mixes less muddy,so I hope its working. Originally I had the whole band in at the start- it seemed to take away from the lyrics so thanks for the nod on the just piano opening. Robert Hello Robert,
what a great song title that's a really strong picture.. And a very nice song, too. Enjoyed the listen.
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Stefan Stefan, Thanks for your listen and comments! Robert
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Nicely done Robert!! Pretty song, and some beautiful lyrical images...reminds me a little of Leonard Cohen! Vocal is very emotive and beautiful. Like Floyd said, great title. You should listen to This Tattoo (great song by David Wilcox). Great stuff here!! Take care. Greg
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I always enjoy the listen and know that I'll like what you write
I'm a fan
you are a creative and great writer
I don't always love the phrasing but it makes it uniquely you
this is a fine write, storytelling is what we're supposed to be about
love it,
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Robert, interesting and fresh! Great lyrics. Interesting harmony. Almost like punk rock sections were smoothed and slowed down for this I enjoyed it! Thank you! Misha. Thanks for that, Misha! I enjoyed the lyrics & your vocal delivery of them...
vivid images leading to the hook... Closer Than A Tattoo
I really like that phrase. I appreciate that - no idea where that line came from, just glad I wrote it down and saved it! Robert, This is a great piece... I love the feel and the dark undertones. Lots of texture and a very cool set of lyrics. I'm all in on this one. Bob Thank you, Bob! Robert
Enjoyed the song - as always an interesting and clever lyric. Has all the hallmarks of your style and is nicely
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Peter Peter, I`m glad you liked this. I guess I have a recognizable lyrical style... sometime I think musically I`d do better to play around with less varied styles though! Robert
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Great band with lots of dynamics in the arrangement. Very clear mix and that pedal steel with it strong reverb fits perfectly. Nice photographic story.
Janne Thank you,Janne! Robert. You got me with the title of this one and it didnt disappoint. Your lyrics are always so well thought out and crafted. Kudos on the production too. Joanne, Thanks for your listen and kind comments! Robert some really really great imaginary in your lyrics. Beautiful contemplation and memories. Really enjoyed the vocals and melody. Very good song. Its good to hear that - particularly on the lyrics; you write some cool images yourself! Awesome tune Robert. Loved the way you started the song. Very cool when the band kicked it. Super vocal. Mix was excellent as well
Thank you, Scott! Robert
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