Originally Posted By: musician17
it kinda starts off well and then maybe loses its way as it goes on? which is why I post it here - for feedback :-) , which would be most welcome! Thanks :-)

Her (on AudioMack)


OK....I gave a listen.
I don't know what you perceive the effort should sound like or your desired goal for the finished composition.
I rarely respond to these sorts of requests for various reasons but I'll chime in with all my subjectivity and be honest.

The tempo is very slow and suits being played in a dentist office as a sedative, so to speak.
If that's your intention, genre wise, then it works for that purpose.

If not....I'll take it further...
The progression sounds meandering and aimless and not captivating.
No motif for the listener to relate to....IE: verse/chorus/melodic motif/sense of dynamics.
It's uninteresting to me as is.
Music has to move me to be remotely appealing.

It takes time/focus to get it right...quick and dirty isn't a well thought out, well structured composition.
I'll stop there and hopefully my candor will be perceived as I intend it to be.
Just honest 'feedback'...we're all adults here with thick skin....right? smile

That's my take....hope that helps.

Last edited by chulaivet1966; 03/10/19 09:01 AM.
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