Thank you both!!!

Chulaivet1966: I was watching Ricky Gervais' "After Life" this morning and there's a scene in it where he just smokes something and abandons himself to the universe, so to speak. That's the kinda feeling I was trying to get in this one ... a complete sort of abandonment. I agree with you ... it's not there yet, I need to look at it again with a fresh mind when I have some proper time! Your feedback is in line with my thoughts, too ... especially in the middle, I feel it loses its way. Thanks therefore for your thoughts and (and this is for everyone) never worry about giving me negative feedback - so long as it's genuinely honest feedback, this is how we all learn - from the negative as well as from the positive! :-)

Ember: thank you. I'll see what I can do by way of improvement to it when I have more time, but thanks for your kind encouragement!

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