Yep... very good write there.

I agree with the things Floyd mentioned.

It had a hint of Tom Waits on the vox... kinda almost raspy but real.
The music had a Springsteen groove from his early days when he was smokin good. He used piano like you do in this song.

Yep, like this a lot.

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