The 1st syllable of your vocal has a plosive D that triggers the effects you've used on the voice in an unpleasant way.
The intro whip or laser sound is similarly aggressive and distracting.
Those two things distract from a good song and a properly retro 80's synth pop vibe.


Cheers
rayc
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