Dan, musically it is a great track and you have done it justice. I don't find it too busy.

Vocally, I think you need help. First, sit / stand UP and open up those vocal chords! I get the feeling you are restricting yourself somehow. Singing while watching what you are playing on the fretboard? I know. I do it myself sometimes. Cut the doubling and get a pop guard. Also, is it actually in the right key for your voice? I feel the key is too low for you.

You're almost there though!

HTH


Follow That Dream

Sam
Karaoke King

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Turning that corner again - I have to keep following that dream, no matter what