Hi Bob,

This is great.

I really love the rhyme schemes that you've used with the lyrics where the first two verses follow the asymmetric ABBXA and the final verse uses the more symmetric ABXBA. As I see it, this is really clever control of the lyric movement and a perfect match for the mystery of vampires.

As I'm sitting here thinking about it, what makes the rhyme scheme work so very effectively for me is...

1. the perfect rhyme on the first last lines in all verses

2. the odd number of phrases/lines with the asymmetric rhyme schemes really boosts the lyrics' emotional content

3. the third verse's symmetric rhyme scheme with the added tag gives a nicely balanced sense of completion and finality

You've used rhyme to drive this bus on a wonderful ride!

All the best,
Noel


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