Originally Posted By: Deej56
Kenny,

Terrific tune—well written and put together really nicely. Love your choice of instrumentation, rolling that accordion into the chorus—nice! And some sweet harmonies to finish it off. My one suggestion—and it’s just a personal preference—might be to use the second chorus twice rather than the first chorus. I think “only break my heart” line resonates a bit more than the “just ran out of smokes” line. Again, all subective, and sharing only for what little it may be worth.

Great stuff, Kenny! Keep them coming!

My best to you,

Deej


Hey Deej,

Thanks for your listen and kind words, it's a perfectly valid suggestion to repeat the chorus
about the girl, I just chose to repeat the part about the state the singer is in (down and out and broke and blue) esp. after the last verse where it's learned he's making the same mistakes (other Spanish princess adventures?)
A creative choice, if you record it, you can repeat the "only break my heart"
chorus.

Last edited by 44kfl; 05/19/19 08:26 AM.