Talent alert here guys.

A poetic, touching and sincere song with well chosen and sympathetic instrumentation.

If I had to give a few corrective pointers they would be:
- in the vox, don’t be in such a hurry to end the phrase
- not sure about that major 9th chord in the string section @ 0:35., 1.40 etc. Perhaps a simple major would ring clearer?
- I also feel the chorus section is a little over-complex. I expect it to resolve sooner. The “tried and tested” technique is to use those build-up passages (in this case ‘Her love showed me the way/like a beacon in the night’) as a lead in to the chorus, rather than as part of it.

But these are really minor suggestions as the piece is very strong as it is.