I think it flowed smoothly and sounded fine - except for the solo drum fill at 1.07 and the toms at 1.27 - they both sounded odd but maybe because the 1st was so naked & the 2nd was a little loud/panned almost to the edge.
The pause & restart at 2.8ish did interrupt the flow a little.
tThe melody is cool - you really should work on the lyrics and get someone to sing.


Cheers
rayc
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