This version is a good indication of an effective narrative and sweet melody.
You vocal does get lost in the chorus though.
I'd love to hear the original version - I have no problem listening to songs not in English.
Thanks Ray for your positive words

I was thinking that my vocal in verses is bit too loud, but nice to notice that people hear things differently

There is a link to the original version in the end of the song info section at soundcloud. Although it is excellently sung, sometimes it's better the writer to express his personal inner landscape.
Janne