Originally Posted By: Jim
A sad, soft, tender ballad...
With solid lyrics
And a great vocal...
I enjoyed listening!

I agree the "rain" should either lengthened or cut...
As far as the title is concerned "Raging Storm"
Could easily be used...
However...
It seems to me that "Bed of Thorns" would also be appropriate.


Deej,
I agree with Jim on the title ( and were it my song I`d flip the order of chorus lines to end with "bed of thorns")... just my 2cents.
Other thoughts, because this is a terrific write and the song deserves attention;
-the intro seemed long & rain at the start not noticeable enough to really set the mood.
-in a such a simple arrangement a little variation and build could help: I thought the electro flute could be held back `til "pieces of you".
- the last verse is powerful-going to just guitar/bass there and bringing strings etc back in for the final chorus was an idea I had.
love the song and your clear intimate vocal!

Robert


Last edited by Robertkc; 01/27/20 01:43 PM.