Hi Bob,

Lovely song, nice crisp sound. I love your use of an AAB/CCB rhyme scheme. A tricky one to use sometimes but you nailed it perfectly.

It's good to hear a definite structure and careful use of syllables that make the song flow so sweetly and naturally. Something a lot of aspiring songwriters are either ignorant of or simply choose not to follow.

Evocative and imaginative lyrics too.

Good job.

Martin


Music is what feelings sound like.