Hello, forum friends

After a short blank again, this is my second post of this year.
This song is written for the latest recording session of our music circle last December.
I would like to introduce you two versions with the same score, which are the RealTrack version and the live band version.
I produced the RealTrack version first, and then I arranged it and wrote the score for the live band.
Any comments encouraged.
Always welcome.

Best regards.

Shigeki Adachi

Title: グッバイマイ一等星 (Translation: Goodbye My First Star)

Vocal: 初音ミク (Hatsune Miku, Vocaloid)

Link of RealTracks Version:
https://soundcloud.com/animarorecords/goodbye-my-first-star

Link of Live Band Version by Yamaha students:
https://soundcloud.com/animarorecords/goodbye-my-first-star-live-band-ver

Style is _SECRETS.STY Secrets Retro Hip Hop w Piano
RealTracks in style: 2743:Bass, Synth, AltHipHop8ths Ev16 085
RealTracks in style: 2704:Synth, Rhythm CloudRapLowOrgan Ev16 075
RealTracks in style: 2705:Synth, Rhythm CloudRapPercussive Ev16 075
RealTracks in style: 1837:Piano, Acoustic, Rhythm PopModernGrooveHeld Ev16 075
RealDrums in Style: CloudRap^02-a:snare, HiHat, light perc, b:snare, layered perc
Obbligato Synthesizer played with Kontakt5 scored by me added

Summary of lyrics:

Falling down from the universe
Hundreds of millions of light years away
Your message reached me
“Hello, how are you? Nice to meet you.”
But where should I send my reply

I wanted to see you, I wanted to see you
And I waited for the night
I wanted to see you but I couldn’t see you
And I waited for the morning
I wanted to see you, I wanted to see you
And I had been waiting for you
I wanted to see you but I couldn’t see you
However I had kept waiting for you forever

Though I don't know your face yet
I kept singing my message to you
For years and decades
Nevertheless you still say
“Hello, how are you? Nice to meet you.”
And “It's your turn next time.”
I only think you're joking

I wanted to see you, I wanted to see you
And I waited for the night
I wanted to see you but I couldn’t see you
And I waited for the morning
I wanted to see you, I wanted to see you
And I had been waiting for you
I wanted to see you but I couldn’t see you
However I had kept waiting for you forever

Goodbye my first star
Please go back to the dust of the universe
And now please don’t say any more
“Hello, how are you? Nice to meet you.”
Goodbye my first star