Thanks everyone!

MarioD: thanks so much! It's so interesting to see so many great musicians have different opinions! I think the moral of the story is that I must, ultimately, trust my own judgement, for good or for bad, haha. Thank you so much - I'm so glad you enjoyed the song!

Hans: "The Servant" was produced about a year ago, when I was worse at dealing with levels and sibilance and all that. I'm not much better now, but a little better I hope I am! haha. I really need to re-do that song ... but thanks for listening to it and thank you for your very kind advice!

Robert: so perceptive! I think you're absolutely spot on, for what it's worth. A little variation in tone, dramatic effect, etc., would definitely help. I was feeling totally under the weather a few days ago, when I wrote this (still am, but recovering, thankfully), so I thought I'd write a song about someone a little under the weather, given the whole world stuff going on right now, etc. - so I probably overdid the whole man-in-pain thing, haha (at the expense of variation, etc.), but that's how I was feeling! haha. Anyway, your comments are definitely food for thought - thanks so much!

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