Originally Posted By: Birchwood
Hi Ray,
I notice you start making songs that are not really my cup of tea. Still they are intriguing to listen to it all the way.
And it's amazing in how short time you put it together. Just 3 days, including the lyrics!
The band is pretty good. It also seems to me you must have had a lot of fun and energy making this song. Very nice!
I have one thing about the mixing of your song. To me your vocals can use more gain/ get upfront. And haven't you thought about a screaming 'double' on the choruses. I can imagine four or five voices screaming allong not to send Debbie (or Nathalie, or Ian) to the kitchen. Have you ever allowed someone into your kitchen? I'm getting ideas how it must look like...
All the best,
Hans

Hans,
Thanks. Yes, it came together pretty quickly. It would've been faster if I hadn't spent a couple of hours trawling through my lyric scrap heap looking for as easy out. As it was the lyric was done in a sitting and tweaked twice since (including once after the posted version).
As the vocal isn't meant as a keeper I didn't explore textures and harmonies but a gang vocal for the chorus is definitely one of the ideas I'm hoping to achieve once I get a vocal sorted. The "screaming" is an excellent idea.
The kitchen in the story is in a Manchester suburb and is infamous/notorious.

Cheers
rayc
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