I'm a big fan of the "repeating" lyric lines ("I don't need to..etc"). And I especially like the "hook" ..."but I do."

I think the between-line doodlings could be cut back a bit...I don't feel like you need that additional "color" to carry the song. Vocal was really nice; pace and meter of the song was spot-on. I enjoyed it overall.

I vote for posting the lyric with the song..makes it easy to follow along and consider the lyric construction.


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