Gary,
very good composition and arrangement.
The ONLY nit is that some noise/sibilant/breaths are a little loud in the vocal track.
Easily addressed if you've the time and inclination.
Quiet/Loud/Quiet - the Nirvana/Pixies template works well for this ballad.


Cheers
rayc
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