Just got back from a vacation in the mountains in Tennessee. The internet was spotty at best, so I haven't had a chance to return to the forum and extend my appreciation to you for taking the time to listen and comment. I'll get to some now.

Originally Posted By: TuneMonger
Great song and well sung, really good use of BIAB. The intro was creative but threw me a little, musically. I'm not sure how you can improve it but I feel like it needs some work to match the rest of the track. Not imperative, you've done exceptional work here.
Originally Posted By: TuneMonger
Great song and well sung, really good use of BIAB. The intro was creative but threw me a little, musically. I'm not sure how you can improve it but I feel like it needs some work to match the rest of the track. Not imperative, you've done exceptional work here.


Originally Posted By: BlueAttitude
Really well done song! Lots of attention to detail. Excellent vocal. Loved what you did for the ending!

The intro is pretty cool, although I'm not sure that it adds anything to the song.

Excellent work, listened a couple of times.


Tunemonger and Dave,Thanks! I am ambivalent about the introduction and don't know if I am going to keep it. Mostly, because it was just some loops I put together. I probably should have written something myself and played it on the synthesizer.


Originally Posted By: rayc
This is cool...
The use of ain't & brain dead run against the generally erudite language of the lyric.
The former because it's a bit lazy and the latter because, to me, it's insulting to folk n families with family members in that state of existence.
The music, the singing, the use of loops and the rest of the lyric are REALLY good.
You'll have to excuse my nit picking on this score - careful language was my trade.


Ray, funny you should pick out the use of "ain't." I used that and "You aren't" while working on the song, but "ain't" sounded better to me and added contrast to the previous lines. I don't mind your nitpicking. I labor over my lyrics and play around with my word choices. I welcome the feedback.


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Originally Posted By: Birchwood
Hi Ezekiel,

Just brilliant, this song and the lyrics! I cannot think who you could [*****] of with these lyrics. Nowadays everyone will agree that your country has a big problem. How wonderful you stated that in these lines; 'The brain dead stayed with you, You’ve won the Goebbels prize'!

Continue the good work, Ezekiel!
Hans



Thanks so much, Hans! You picked out my favorite lines in the song, which will probably irritate song members of my family.

Originally Posted By: BabuMusic
This is great, Ezekiel. So well said, and sung. I really like the arrangement. "The brain dead stayed with you
You’ve won the Goebbels prize" Perfect!!


Thank you, Marty. --See above reply.
Originally Posted By: floyd jane
I enjoyed the opening fanfare.

Great drum sound! I really like the somewhat-dry vocal processing - it is perfect for the song. The vocal is excellent. The guitar fills are well done. Nice rhythm change at 2:20.

Excellent lyric. Hilarious. Sad truth.

The Gospel BGVs are cool. And a cool ending.

Very well done.

fj



Thanks, Floyd. I always appreciate your feedback!