Originally Posted By: Deej56
Hans,
Good sound to this one, strong blues like rhythm. Love those synth chops—adds some nice flavor. Agrees with Floyd the vocal is a little high end in spots; and I think that lead guitar lick in the opening can come down in volume just a tad. Love that guitar solo at the 2:40 or so mark. Ambitious production but you were up to the challenge.

I had read Dave’s comment about the ending being too abrupt before getting there . . . I thought it worked as is, but certainly worth trying his suggestion.
Good work on this, Hans!

Hope all is well with you,
Deej


Hi Deej, I was away for some days, so sorry for the delay in my response to you.
But before I went off, I did al you, Floyd, Dave, Misha and Ray wrote about the 'hot' vocals, the lead and the abrupt ending.
I think it is allright by now, because Ray (the last post) made no comment on those issues.
And the abrupt ending was a mistake I made, but hadn't noticed as such. So I thought it wouldn't be so easy adding a bar, as Dave suggested. But it was, after all.

Originally Posted By: Will Josef
There is something about this track I really liked and enjoyed, but the guitar solo felt a bit like it was not in the same room as the rest of the band (especially in the beginning)... Anyway.. some good ideas in this track. Keep up the good work!

Will


Hi Will, thanks for listening. I have to admit I couldn't fix what you wrote about. It is not that I didn't want to, but I didn't hear what you said. I always work with 3 different kind of reverbs, for the vocals, the percussion and the other instruments. And of course that sometimes differs. So here it was the same kind of reverb for all instruments. But explain what you hear, or where you here it.
Anyway, thanks a lot for your comments on the song. I appreciated it!

Originally Posted By: rayc
EXCELLENT chorus.
the processing on your voice blurs it a little bit and accentuates some of the more strident frequencies.
Tame that & you'll have something that will reward repeated listening.


Hello Ray, I think I solved the blurriness, although I didn't notice it was there. So how I fixed it? Just mixed everything again and the eq almost to zero on the vocals (joking a bit)
But I was very fond with your first line, Ray! Still I am afraid a repeated listening of that song was not what I experienced. I than took a bottle of wine in my fists...

Originally Posted By: jannesan
Good stories have usually a catch, and here you have told it in a nice way so that the listener keeps waiting for it. And yes, the twist makes me smile. Your strong voice carries the story very well.

Strong rock groove with nicely mixed guitars supporting the enjoyable chord progression and catchy chorus. It is also great idea to let guitars rest for a while and bass and organ take the lead, gives nice dynamic to the arrangement. Synth hits and solo guitarist are also very good instrument selections. Very good use of holds, although the ending hold is perhaps not perfect, but on the other hand, I like imperfection smile

Janne


Hi Janne, thanks a lot for your nice comment on the song. I almost saw you smiling! I think you must have heard the version where all the complains of the others were -nearly- solved. Otherwise you probably would have supported them, oor you are just too kind for that...

Originally Posted By: Ezekiel's Storm
I enjoyed the humor in the lyrics.

The chorus is a real standout for me.


Hello Ezekiel, thanks for this nice comment. i like adding some humor in lyrics if I have the change for it. Sometimes the topic can't bear it, but this one does!

Thank you all for your comments. I have learned from and enjoyed them!
Hans

Hans Berkhout
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