Originally Posted By: Charlie Fogle
A 1977 write. Had me wonder how close to the original version what we hear in 2020 remains? A walk with no destination on a journey that never ends... Perfect setting for loneliness and silence. Enjoyed my listen.


Originally Posted By: Tano Music
I also noticed, right off the bat, that this is work that was done a long time ago, so I was immediately interested in hearing the “early” Floyd. I especially liked that your stanzas ended with an impersonal “you” , then “she”, and finally “me”..a kind of progressively-personalizing reflection. And you had some really nice intra-line rhymes..to me, these are like little verbal Velcro hooks that keep you listening closely. As others have said, the musical setting and performance are top-notch...the only thing I would have done differently is maybe a vocal repeat of that last phrase, but that’s just personal preference...excellent!
PS..I’ll add my vote to some feedback on how this might be different from your 1977 performance of same.


Charlie and Tano - thanks for having a listen...

The song is pretty much as I wrote it in '77 with a couple tweaks to the lyric. When I decided to record this, I hadn't played it for probably 30 years and when I did play, there were 2 spots in the lyric that didn't sit right for me now. Both in the last verse.

Originally:

"pouring shadows down into the street
in accusing, painful words"

...sounded like the young developing writer that I was at the time. Too wordy and a bit over dramatic. So that I changed:

"pouring shadows down into the street
sharp, accusing words..."

(even that made me wince a little).


Originally:

"but i sit and watch the light stay on
as it waits to meet the day"

...again sounded like an "early over-poetic" writer.
So that became:

"but i sit and watch the light stay on
and try to keep out of its way"

...which I liked a bunch better. It gives more depth to the story at that point.


Of course, the original was always played with just a guitar.
Being able to add the BAND really helped to bring the song to life (to my ears)

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