Originally Posted By: Rustyspoon#
Hans,
Sad, he did not make it, the good part is that vocals sit very comfortably in the mix smile
Unusual tune with some very intricate articulations. Solid composition. The only distraction to my taste was the fiddle. Interesting listen! Thank you for sharing.

Misha.


Hi Misha, probably he didn't make it. It's not quite sure yet, but it looks bad, that's true.
And I was a bit surprised you called the fiddle a distraction. I was convinced you would like it. I added it because of you (no, joke). I liked it myself. The sax and the swinging melody were the contrast to the story, the fiddle not.
Thanks for your comment!

Originally Posted By: rayc
A really nice backing and melody.
there're some problems with the grammar/syntax of the lyric that doesn't seem to bother anyone...they did grab my attention though.
There's ambiguity in the lyric which is cool but there're a few spots that don't sem to flow in terms of a consistent narrative.
Nevertheless, it's a thoughtful and brave song.


Hi Ray, Thanks for your compliments, but (like my answer to Misha) I was a bit surprised you brought up a narrative issue. To me there wasn't any. It's all from the perspective of the soldier. It is his story; how it started (the letter), what they (the government) promised, what happend (the fight and capture of the base and he hiding) and the end (losing his faith, coming home). To me this is alright in that narrative way. But let me know where you think where that ambiguity occurs. It is more your language than mine and I like to learn.

Originally Posted By: TuneMonger
I felt like there was a whole lot of plot for one little song to handle. Left me with many questions about what actually happened. But a good song nonetheless and your usual quality musicianship shone throughout.


Hi TuneMonger, thanks for yur compliments as wel! But I disagree with you on the scope of the story, or plot. Actually it is a simple story; a man was called for duty. He ventilates his disbelief this all happens to him througout the song (3 times). They (his leader/government) promised him his duty will be safe and he is coming home in 'a while'. That didn't happen the way they told him. His disbelief of their promise got the upperhand and he ends up in big trouble. That is the whole story.

But I agree with you that you can fantasize over a lot of things what happend, like what conflict, in what country, what was going on, etcetera. When I wrote the song I had Irak or Afghanistan on my mind. Not WWII or Vietnam, but it doesn't matter where it was for this song. It was about getting into big trouble and the broken promises.

But thank you all for bringing these remarks to my attention, because it showed how you were thinking about the song and the story. And that's what matters!
Hans

Hans Berkhout
(Birchwood)
https://soundcloud.com/user-296497130