Hi mr. Jones,

I read this is your first contribute to the BiaB forum. So Welcome!
And an entrance with a rocker from the 70's for a girl dressed in blue. I got curious, but read you never saw her again.
That is not the reason it brings me to your song, but in this forum we mainly talk about our songs.

I think you did a nice job on this one.
But I also agree with Ray on the issues he wrote.
If you are able to clear that up, this will be a very nice song, the melody already is!

Stay safe,
Hans


Hans Berkhout
(Birchwood)
https://soundcloud.com/user-296497130