Excellent work. What I liked about it:
Great lyric..”Cost of age” fantastic phrase
Story told within the economy of the melody, very naturally.
Top-notch vocal performance.

Greg, if you permit me to say this, in a complimentary way: This song demonstrates that a simple, basic musical score can allow a stellar lyric-story and vocal performance to stand out. Sometimes I think that over-designing the backing is a mistake; here, your design choices are perfect.

And thank you very much for having the fortitude to avoid a “clever” trap to somehow go to “66” or “88” in the line following “”22” and “44”—I would have been suckered into that one myself!

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