Great concept. Although you label it as funk, I am strongly reminded of Alan Parsons.

Totally agree with the comments on the instrumental mix. Everything needs to be as punchy as the bass and drums. Pan things out to give a sense of space.

Standard comments about the vox. Stand up! Breathe! Take care of pitch issues (sometimes caused, in part, by improper breathing) and the part is on par with the rest. Or are you out of your range? Maybe sing it an octave down and pitch shift it up?

This one is worth a little reworking. I look forward to hearing the remix.

R.


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