Tina,

A good first BIAB effort. I'm sure you'll have fun as your journey continues.

Adding in drums and bumping up the metal bass RT will give you some more Rock punch (as others have noted). You list a RealDrum track, but if it is there, it is so low it cannot be heard (for this style song, it should be as loud as your vocal). You could bring them in on the first chorus - the opening works with just guitar.

Welcome to the Showcase.

fj