I’ll echo pretty much every thing that David said above..plusses and suggestions. One thing I’ll add..I think that your opening line could be improved..the way you broke up “cou—ould” into two syllables to cover the melody notes wouldn’t be a bad idea if you were going to continue that pattern throughout...but a better approach would be to re-engineer that first phrase...that’s what I wou—ould do!


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