Such a fun journey, David. I listened to both version, and prefer the female --not just because I usually do, but the content seems to fit better. (well, that's a pretty useless comment).
I'll admit, the female lead worked out better than I thought it would. I could spend more time cleaning it up, but I think I'll focus on the next song instead.
I like how you compose with passion and purpose, and I really like The Backstory --entertaining AND informative and useful.
Well, if you call banging my head against the wall
passion...

Yes, I caught all the references except the rabbit. i was trying to fit it in Alice's rabbit hole.
They're related, which is probably why I thought of in the first place.
I also took liberties with the word
"old" here. The original line was:
Stuffed rabbit in a field
telling others he is realBut without context, it was hard to understand the word
"stuffed". By putting it into a less fragmented sentence, I hoped to make it easier to understand, although
"old" really doesn't happen until later in the story. Call it poetic license.
Perhaps something like this would eliminate the ambiguity:
Velveteen rabbit in a field
tells wild rabbits he is realI'll give it some more consideration.
Thanks for stopping by and commenting!
