Originally Posted By: NigelSpiers
Hi Ray,
Not my genre but I really liked the song so here goes:
Vocals - in tune, well sung and right level for this genre.
Instruments - all good - loved that organ in the intro - maybe could be featured more throughout the song. I did not hear any drum fills - is this on purpose?
Song - nice chord progressions. Could do with a little more light and shade. What about dropping out all instruments except say guitar, organ or just guitar, drums and vocals in the second half of the song for say 8 bars and bringing all instruments back for the chorus? Or What about a stop verse?
This kind of light and shade doubles the value of any song.
Plus no re-recording necessary - just do it all in the DAW in a few minutes.
A good mastering engineer will also suggest this and the A&R folks will love it.
Good luck with your song.
Best Regards
Nigel

Thanks for the detailed response Nigel,
There're plenty of drum fills - at each change in the structure if nowhere else..they may feel subsumed by the tom action but they are there.
Organ...it's there as accent mainly and pops out more at the end of phrases/sections.
Light and shade dynamics are important but so, in this instance of a short song, is full tilt relentlessness which I opted for - it's what the tom patterns reinforce.
A good producer would suggest changes and an ME that one has a good relationship may do. My ME & I have a good creative relationship and he's suggested many great ideas and offered to do interesting things for gratis such as the snare treatment on this old track Thanatoginous...

in which he offered to do a Bowie/Hansa Eventide thing on a sep. snare stem and then insert into the snareless render. I think he did a cool job of it.
A&R? Well, perhaps if I were 30 years younger and less self aware that may influence me.
The track was mastered a couple of days ago so, to avoid spending again, it'll have to stay as is. I'll keep your ideas in mind for the next project though, (it has several holes punched it it already for dynamics and emphasis).
Cheers

Last edited by rayc; 06/17/21 01:51 PM.
Cheers
rayc
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