Hi Ray,

I answer your post first, so probably the others will be angry in a while. But I had to!
You were complaining about 3 issues and while I like to disagree on each of them, I couldn't. You were right. Yes, it's there, right before you: You were right on 2 (at least)!

Originally Posted By: rayc
Hans,
cool song but three things struck me:
There's something hyped and a bit too aggressive in your vocal treatment. I suspect that hearing fatigue would happen after a couple of end to end listens.

the kick drum is quite aggressive in tone and level..not much can be done in BIAB but a multi band compressor might let you treat it in a DAW.

and

Lyrics...
"I called you so many times
Wishing you would hear my sound
But that didn't happen
While I thought we had a bound"
I think the correct final word in that stanza may be "bond".

A lovely story, a good melody and structure.


What I did after your post:

1. The lyrics: I normally check the use of proper English in my lyrics, but I did not on words I thought were right. So, I changed them.
2. Fatique singing: Because of the changing of the lyrics I had to do the singing again. You said fatique would happen if people listen to my song. I don't agree with you, of course, but I kept it in mind while singing again. My cat liked it.
I hope this new singing stands your fatique test. Let me know!
3. The drum volume: I wanted a snappy sound of reggaedrums and raised the volume a bit more than I normally do. But after your complains I altered the volume again. Not that I agree with you, but maybe someone else complains on it as well. So I engaged in risk-averse behavior (!)

And on SoundCloud I thanked you for your efforts making me a better musician. And in this post I also thank you for your compliments on the song.

Bye Ray, have a nice day,
Hans


Hans Berkhout
(Birchwood)
https://soundcloud.com/user-296497130