Ok, I know you're a little green to this whole song writing thing, so I'll let this one slide. That being said, I do like to give unsolicited advice whenever I can.

That title stands out too much. You want a title that looks like a lot of other titles in your same genre...and we'll cover the whole genre issue in a minute. If you put 1000 song names in a list, yours is going to "catch the eye" and cause intrigue. That's not what you're looking for. People need something relatable. I noticed the first word of the first line of the song is "She." THAT should have been your title.

Now this whole genre thing. Music has genre's for a reason. That reason is, songs need to stay the same. Anything new or different must be judged against a genre to point out how "it's not the same as it used to be."

You need to understand that If it hasn't already been done, it was a bad idea. You didn't see the likes of Johnny Cash using all of these options and techniques that have been invented in the last few years, did you?

I normally know where a song is going so can turn it off fairly early into it. You know it's a good song if you can guess most of it before hearing much of it. Your song was kind of all over the place lyrically and instrumentally that I had to listen to all these little things popping up then going away, some returning. I mean, sure they sound good together but that doesn't mean they should be played together. In school, you have music class, and you have art class. Those classes are separate for a reason. There is to be NO art in music!

Speaking of art what's with the cover? The Beatles had the white album, Spinal Tap the Black Album...yours has like color and stuff. It made me stare at it a bit and think different things. I don't like thinking! In keeping with the "She" title, consider a black silhouette of a woman with maybe a sunset. That may be pushing it; but I'm trying to appease you a bit. White would be my preferred background.

I'm not even going to go into the those lyrics. Again, the idea is NOT to have the listener continue to have to listen. I won't go into the melody either. I mean, it's awful. It sticks in your head. Who wants that? I tried listening to other songs but "Cow...girl...Cinder-ella" keeps dominating my thoughts. Putting the power guitar behind it didn't help any either.

Production is for hiding mistakes. Just because I can't find any production errors doesn't mean you haven't made them. I would have to SEE what you are doing to know if it sounds right or not.

Anyway, I didn't mean to tear your song apart to show you how much better I could make it. I guess if I had to give you one piece of advice I would say, remember that music was never meant to be creative. It's about rules and adhering to them. Also, don't copy.

So, hang in there. Keep writing. I'll be here to help you think inside the box.

Chad (Hope that makes it easier)

TEMPO TANTRUM: What a lead singer has when they can't stay in time.