You're certainly committed to the presentation.
The use of Old Testament stories is interesting.
I'm not sure children are familiar or can relate to the Old Book and they'd certainly be confused about the Bride.
I thought the music was going to lift off into another level of intensity OR relief at 3.03 but neither came.
You might consider a dynamic change - tempo or key - to carry the listener through the 2nd half as it's a long song - I gave up when the guitar solo petered out - I took it as a sign and skipped to the ending.

Cheers
rayc
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