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To The Stars (demo)

Robert Dean showcased his demo song on this forum and he was interested in hearing other members' demos and outtakes. So here is one of mine.

In early 2018 I read this David Snyder's forum post. It inspired me to write this song, thanks to David for that It was intended to be sung by a female with my vocals dueting in the chorus. I asked one woman to sing it, but she hasn't commented this request so far. I haven't actively sought another singer, so the song will most likely be buried in the sand of history, but I thought it might be interesting to hear your opinions about it as a demo version, anyway. The lead vocal track is only a guide track for the real singer, I have used the Vocaloid Cyber Diva for that. Also my vocal track is just a rough take, because I don't have the final female track to match with. Thus, no much vocal mixing or de-essing. Also rhythm of the lyrics in some parts would need some polishing.

For the music itself, I got inspiration from dream pop style, especially Finnish band called Cats of Transnistria.

I hope you find at least something to comment about in this unfinished work.

RealDrums: BossaBrushes, MarkTree

RealTracks:
Acoustic Bass Bowed #2483 + Amplitube 3
Acoustic Piano #2808
Electric Guitar (DI) #2879 + Amplitube 3
Electric Guitar Strum Dirty #1018 + Amplitube 3
Electric Guitar Muted (DI) #836 + Amplitube 3
Electric Guitar soloist #1836, #2690
Synth #2582
Vibes #1215
Organ #688

MIDI:
Tremolo Strings - The Orchestra
Elven Choir - The Orchestra

Vocals: Vocaloid Cyber Diva and me

Lyrics:

Standing in line at the boarding gate
passengers of dreams always have to wait
a ticket in the hand wishing that a heart sign
a thumb up and some heart-warming words
on the heading line
would open the VIP door
even when the flight to the stars
is overbooked once more.

This is a journey like falling in love
together for better each other to shove
driven by the same dream for light years ahead
heartening the shy mates to pilot instead.

Fighting for seats in the business class
romantics of life not privileged to pass.
the majority won't get a nice place by the window
they have to settle for crumbs of hope
in the afterglow
never reaching a heavenly scoop
but they build their own starlit show
by the support of their group.

This is a journey...

You want to be stared and admired every night
but you don't see the reality
you'll be blinded by light
burned by heat
crushed by gravity.

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Janne

Janne,

Great to hear some of your unreleased material. I enjoyed that very much - cool to hear the creative process.

Bob

Janne, you have a great start here. The backing tracks are really good. Once you get a real female singer and you sing your harmonies I'm sure that you will have a winner on your hands.

my goodness that vocaloid is the first time ive heard that.
impressive !
might i suggest leaving out the drums ? or just haveing the odd tom hit here and there ? ie very subtle.
i really like the cinematic style of this song.
and that CHANGE AT 3mins10secs.
this evening i must be in a female choir mood cos this song with
a massed female choir would be amazeing imho.

very well done !
om

Hi Janne,

This is such a aural feast!!!! To my ears, the whole presentation is a festival of sounds. There is so much creativity on show absolutely everywhere. You've really unleashed your inner Richard Wagner with this one.

Love it

All the best,
Noel

Janne,

Cool atmospheric intro and also throughout it maintains that ethereal sound texture! Lovely chord progression! I think you have something here that is worth your time to continue to polish until you are satisfied with the final product! Take care, Torrey.

Is VOCALOID a VST plugin? That's ... not bad for an artificially created voice. I might have to check it out.

I'll be interested to hear how you end up fleshing this out. Sounds ... ethereal.

Thanks Bob, I'm glad to hear you enjoyed my demo

Janne

Thanks Mario for your kind feedback Probably this demo won't ever progress more, but good to know I might have had a winner

Janne

Thanks om for your positive words and suggestions Leaving out the drums, that's an interesting idea, if I ever come back to the song, I'll consider that, the bossabrushes I used are not in line with the over all style. And I hope to find a big female choir to sing it

Janne

Janne,
Very different from all I have heard by you. Dark New age sound. Excellent job on robo girl, I think it suits overall song feel. So interesting to hear another vocals, recognizing your phrasing At this stage, I would not even look for a live vocalist and call it done.
Thank you for sharing.
Misha.

Hi jannesan,

It is a beautiful composition. It remains to find a nice voice like that of Janice (& Bud). Good luck.

Kindly regard
Derochette
alias JaniJackFlash

Janne,

Quite a soundscape. This has a "current" vibe.

The vocaloid works well for this. Synths are good. Guitar solos, too.

Sounds close to done to me. Because it has that modern sound, you might consider using finger snaps or claps along with the sidestick (or in place of it).

fj

Very cool song Janne. Love those vocaloid tunes. Excellent backtrack. The duet was very very cool. Well done

Hi Janne,

I actually love the vocaloid when it is used like this... this was a very inspiring song to listen to!

Good work!

Will

Hi Janne,

Very impressed with the vocaloid, sounded much better than I expected it too. Especially sounds good when mixed in with your vocal.

Guitar solos work well.

Good track, enjoyed!

Thanks Noel, always pleasure to read your positive review "Inner Richard Wagner", that was really nicely said

Janne

Thanks Torrey for your kind and supportive comment Glad you liked the chord progression, even when it's quite complicated this time. Let's see when I get some inspiration to work on this more.

Janne

Thanks Phil for listening and commenting Ethereal - I was aiming for that. Vocaloid I'm using is not a VST plugin, but sort of a sequencer program. There might have been a plugin for Cubase in some Vocaloid version.

Janne

Oh yeah!

Man, these lyrics are SO incredible and so appropriate for today.

I love this, Janne, but I have to say, the lyrics are so good I would love to hear also an alternate arrangement where it is more simple, maybe just guitar, or something with a slow build, where you sing it, and you can really hear the poetry of the lyrics.

Just a thought! Love these lyrics I am telling you!