The line "Shod your feet with the gospel of peace" might be worth reviewing...you're creating an image of feet wrapped in bibles. it'd be a tad disrespectful I suspect.

The vocal affectation works for the intro and might even do for the verse but the chorus needs something to lift it from the war monger's rhetoric and old testament imagery into some form of hope.

Without some sort of modulation, dynamic change or new instrumentation it's a relentless, dour 3+ minutes BUT it could be easily redeemed with a few simple changes so that it becomes a journey rather than a forced march.


Cheers
rayc
"What's so funny about peace, love & understanding?" - N.Lowe