Typically your style. Very interesting song with a lot of potential!
But I only heard the third version.

The melody is nice, the vocals kind of sweet and even almost shy, while that drummer gone too wild for this composition.
So either sing the song more wildly, with some screams, or tame that drummer. That is what I think.
But maybe the lyrics can't handle that suggestion. They are very nice.

Hans

Hans Berkhout
(Birchwood)
https://soundcloud.com/user-296497130