James,

I hope I don't offend by saying the following: I think you are overthinking things. As I wrote, you are already half-singing the tune. And the beauty of modern technology is that you can do as many takes as it . . . well, takes. I'd be ashamed, I think , to confess how many vocal tracks I record sometimes to get something that's just right. I'm just saying you have a nice timbre to your vocal . . . you should embrace it more . . . and it would shine in this tune. Take that for what it's worth . . . from an encouraging friend. In the end, it's your creation, so go with what feels right to you.

My very best to you as always,

Deej