Hi Jim

I fully enjoyed the listen and to my really diminished hearing your voice came through just fine. Great lyrics, nice tune but I think it needs some musical intervention to be completed. I love the song - but you need some spots (choruses would be good start) to add additional instruments or vocal harmony . . . something not found in the verses - strings would be a nice touch. This will add musical interest and a change up to keep the listeners attention.

The idea being to slowly build your production towards a climax (maybe last verse all musical elements are added). But this will only happen for the listener if the instrumentation is not the same from beginning to end. That's why I suggested starting to add something different to chorus, or as Mario said to maybe start the song with acoustic (maybe add a waltz fiddle RT through the intro as a lead) with the piano coming in on the first verse - just to give you an idea of what I'm trying to say.

Your song's core is solid, now do what this wonderful software does so well.
Hat's off to you for a good song.

Ian

Ian
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