Video one was interesting because it was based on Jimmy Webb.
The song result?
Well, it sounded like it was written for an off Broadway musical...almost spoken, pushing a narrative, a few clunky rhymes and needing sets and acting to reinforce/hold up the piece the the absence of hooks.
Better than mine though.


Cheers
rayc
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