Originally Posted By: floyd jane
An excellent listen. A good write.

Hi, floyd jane.

Thanks! That (for me) is the most important bit, and I especially appreciate that coming from you.

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The instrumentation is exceptional. Drums and Bass dominate with just the right amount of coloring from other instruments - the classic Pop formula, done to perfection!

The mix is solid.

Again, great to hear! I think I mentioned elsewhere that I'm going to see if I can be more "pop" this year, so it's good to know I've started right.

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You keep notching those singers higher with each new song. Impressive.

The female vocalist is the latest voice to be released. She's the first American English singer, and I think that comes through. Plus, the vocals are getting more natural with each release.

So I don't think I can take all the credit here... but I'll take a bit of credit, anyway. wink

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LOVE!!! the chorus!!!
...with one caveat.
The last line "leaves you hanging". It's too short.

I'm sure you're right.

When I put the song together (even before the lyrics), I had left off the introduction and the ending, figuring that I'd get around to them eventually.

I really liked the way the song just started out with a bang - not even a drum fill - so I left that "As Is".

But I was still puzzled as to what to do with the ending. As it is, there's no bridge or instrumental, and the song feels short.

But... I didn't think there was anything left to say, so I was sort of at a loss what to do. Repeating the chorus again felt a bit lazy.

When I just cut the song off, I thought that it worked within the context of the lyrics.

So I'm not deeply tied to this particular ending, and I suspect simply wanting to be done with this had more to do with that decision than anything else. So I'm certainly open to the idea of reworking the ending.

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I NEVER make songwriting suggestions to people (I view this forum to be about production, not songwriting)...BUT...
I wanted that last line to continue/extend...simply repeat it..
"It's time to fly... time to fly....fly...."
(and that last "fly" could be "echo-y")

That sounds like a production suggestion to me, not a songwriting suggestion. wink

And songwriting suggestions are accepted, too. I have a habit of tweaking lyrics even after a song is posted (for example, I removed "dear", although I'm not sure it was an improvement). I'm usually too stubbornly wedded to my own ideas to accept lyric changes from other people, but it helps me understand what did or didn't work.

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COOL stuff. Well done.

Thanks! blush

-- David Cuny
My virtual singer development blog

Vocal control, you say. Never heard of it. Is that some kind of ProTools thing?