Ray, it's like the difference between night and day! Your vocal sound great to me! Once again, I really love that chorus! It really stays with the listener for a while! Thanks, Torrey
Thank you Torrey,
Basically the chorus melody is, as you can hear: root, 5th, root then semitone shift down, semi tone shift down to start again.
I prefer an excellent voice wielded by a passionate performer, such as yourself but needs must.