You have a good start here. This is a very good song.

My suggestions for the chorus would be as follows:
1-replace that distorted guitar. To these old ears it just doesn't fit with the rest of the song.
2-shorten the second hard. Do not sing it into the next chord.

Note these are only my opinions and other may or may not agree. YMMV

A good start and with a little polish it will shine.


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