Originally Posted By: Birchwood
Hello Ray,

This is quite different from the one before. But a very intriquing one too!
At first I thought; 'the vocals need to be louder', then; 'the song seems to be getting a bit monotonous', then; 'where is the song leading to?'
But then: 'what intriguing lyrics!' And 'hey, singing in this way reinforces the tension that already speaks from the lyrics'.
I then listened again and the song grabbed me like, like... i don't know like what, but it grabbed me.
And then I noticed I hadn't watch the video. So i played it again. Conclusion: very well done, Ray!

but, your voice could have used some more volume...

Hans


Thanks Hans,

I tried to place the narrator as detached and unemotional, (dissociative?)...you heard and understood well. Thank you.


Cheers
rayc
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