David,

The introduction is Outstanding. Love the BAND! It's pure '70's Radio Pop Ballad.

This DOES have a real Paul Williams quality to it. (excellent inspiration choice).

A good write. The Chorus is excellent. Some nicely penned Love Song verse lines (that can be a tough nut).
(I've erased this next comment several times - but figured you MIGHT want to hear it - even if you say "that's not true"... There is a bit of a "pieced-together-ness" to the verses. A lot of good - even better than good - lines and phrases that somehow felt scattered (?? not quite the right word...). They did not naturally lead me to the chorus. It felt a little "bumpy". That might come off sounding "harsher" than it is intended - because it really is just a "bit of a feeling"..

GREAT melody!

Kevin is pretty amazing.

You (and you son) are doing some Wonderful work!!

fj

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