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Hi, folks:

I’ve been far more absent from the board than I’ve wanted the past couple of months, but I’ve finally had the opportunity to spend some time checking out some tunes these past few days. I’ll just say it’s a privilege to be a part of such a great community of talented artists. Just wonderful music!

Unfortunately my musical efforts have been sidetracked of late, mainly due to multiple trips these past couple of months cross county to visit my ailing Dad (who, God bless, is finally at peace). And, beyond that I’ve been in a bit of a songwriting slump, having not penned any originals in more than a few months. So I used what time I had to re-mix some past songs and post two new “albums”—one a solo effort and the other featuring collaborations with John Vaughan (under the band name Kendal Bays)—most all of which you’ve heard here. Still not professional mixes, but hopefully respectable enough.

At any rate, given the aforementioned slump, I decided to revisit some older tunes. I wrote and recorded this song—“Edelweiss”—four years ago, before I discovered BIAB. There is folklore associated with this scarce, short-lived mountain flower—how young men would dare to climb the mountains and cliffs on which they grew to gather them for their intended and prove their love. The song is a bit of a tragic take on that folklore (or that was the intent, at least).

Not sure if it’s appropriate etiquette but for those interested in listening to the original (and quite flawed) acoustic version, I’ll provide a link to it. If nothing else it hopefully demonstrates the power of the BIAB software—don’t know what I’d do without it!

I’m still not sure the mix on the new version is quite where it needs to be, but I’ll trust you will all point me in the right direction. Thanks in advance for the feedback.

Deej

Here’s the song (BIAB Version):

EDELWEISS (HEY NOW)

Here’s the original acoustic version:

Acoustic Version

Here are the Lyrics: Actually, given the length of my post, I’m going to refer you to the SoundCloud lyrics if you’d like to read along. But I can add them back in here if folks find that more helpful.

And here’s the band:

RealTracks 2743: Bass, Synth, AltHipHop8ths Ev16 085
RealTracks 1581: Guitar, Acoustic, Rhythm Folkie16ths Sw16 085
RealTracks 802: Guitar, Electric, Rhythm SouthernSnappyGritty Ev 090 (B:8ths)
RealTracks 688: Guitar, Electric, Rhythm PopPromiseGritty8s Ev16 100
RealTracks 1037: Guitar, Acoustic, Rhythm NorthernRockBallad Ev 065
RealTracks 3621: Guitar, Electric, Rhythm AmbientBalladArp Ev16 065
RealDrums: RockHardLA^1-a:Snare, HiHat , b:Snare, Loose HiHat
Additional Guitar: Deej56

BIAB Version: This grabbed me from the get-go. Hypnotic rhythm. Your vocal is one of your best. Emotional and resonant. BGVs are just awesome.

I revisited the acoustic version. Both good. I don't have a preference.

Man, this is intense... and NOT the song from "The Sound of Music". I am enjoying this song very much.

Your absence has not diminished your ability to deliver!

This is wonderful!

Fantasist write, perfect band and as always, terrific vocals!

This has such a classic but yet fresh sound, I love it.

So well constructed and performed.

Did I mention the mix?.....It's excellent!

moto

What a cool song! Excellent delivery.
Intriguing lyrics...

Deej,
fabulous song & INTENSE indeed.
Personally I'd want some more meaty Neil young/Crazy Horse guitars in there as well but that a druther - what you have is fabulous.

Hi Deej,

A cool rhythm, wonderful vocals and very nice theme!
You made very creative lyrics on that theme. when reading "Edelweiss" I feared a parody on the Sound of music song, but you made a very swinging song. I enjoyed it very much, but that's nothing special; I always enjoy your songs.

Hans

Listened to your BIAB version. Excellent!

Good song!!! Dark and brooding, musically, excellent lyrics. The versions are different, both good, the BIAB version is more meaty, that's all. The backing track in the BIAB version sounds a little like what I would expect from an Eminem backing track :-) ... but it works!

If I'm to be 100% honest, I would say that I miss hearing more vulnerable songs from you. Songs like "If You Stay", "If I Stop Loving You" or countless others where you just break our hearts with that kind of vulnerability. However: just because I prefer those doesn't mean that this other kind of song isn't great, too - it really is, and I really admire your versatility - you're not a "one-trick pony" at all, which is brilliant. It's just a preference thing, though: when I think "Deej", I think "Prayer to the World", "If You Stay", "I've Got The Moon", even (so much kindhearted humour in that one, whilst still staying vulnerable), etc. etc. etc.

But you keep doing you. It's like saying I prefer cakes; of course I would, but if I ate ONLY cakes, that wouldn't be good at all, either :-) ... and it does NOT mean that, just because it's a different kind of meal, it's not at least just as good! So you keep treating us with whatever you enjoy doing, at any given time, of course ... just don't forget the vulnerability, from time to time? ;-)

Bravo :-)

Deej,

WOW! Talk about HITTING ON ALL CYLINDERS!!

For my money, this is one of the BEST things that's ever been posted in the Showcase (and that's a very high bar - there is an amazing amount of top quality music that hits here).

An excellent write. Excellent.

I agree this is your BEST vocal ever. Killer.

LOVE the BAND. Amazing use of BIAB. And the mix is flawless.

This is a hit.

fj

Hi David
The BiaB version is extra class.
Especially because of your great vocals.
The sound is also excellent
Really very well done.
Many greetings
Andi ;-)

A great song.
Both versions are beautiful, but the acoustic version is more energetic. It grabbed us more than the BIAB version.
This might be, because your voice in the acoustic version is louder and more "in front".
It may also be because of the difference in music of both versions.
The contrast between the powerful vocals and guitar music of the acoustic version makes it more intensive than the BIAB version.
But.... it's only a matter of taste!
Lovely vocals.

Rob and Anne-Marie

Great song. Original, unique and very captivating. The way the melody worked with those vocals kept me on the edge of my seat waiting to hear the next sounds coming my way. Great job.

Ezekiel, Mark, Cap’n, bloc-head, rayc, Hans, Dave, James, Floyd, Andi, RnAM, and Brad:

Thank you all for the listens and kind words. There’s always that little bit of doubt and second-guessing before I let something fly . . . so pleased that this seems to have hit the mark. A few quick responses to some of your feedback:

Ezekiel and RnAM: I’m OK with the acoustic version for the most part . . . but it’s really not a great production . . . might have been the fourth or fifth song I recorded once I started recording. I’m a marginal guitar player, and at that point I don’t believe I knew how to EQ or pan, so it could be much better. I do think the vocal is a bit more . . . intimate, perhaps? . . . and maybe that’s what RnAm is picking up on as well.

rayc: Well, I did experiment with some electric solo RTs . . . but nothing seemed to really fit, often making the song a bit too busy. And given there are so few musical breaks between the vocals, it wasn’t working for me. But I get where you’re going, and a more ingenious producer than I might have found a way.

James: I’m sure the vulnerable songs will come in time . . . though right now I’m wishing for just about for any song to come, LOL. They will, as they always do . . . I hope. :-)


Stay safe and stay well all.

Deej

Deej,

Don't mind me, of course. I am just yapping, really, lol. You do you - not least because you know exactly what you are doing, with every song. I don't want to praise too much or anything, but this is honest from me: when I will have at least half your standard in songwriting, never mind singing, we can give my ramblings some more credence, perhaps :-) . Thanks for your patience with me :-)

Deej,

I listened to your BIAB version first.
Excellent!
The guitar riffs played throughout are very distinctive and fit this song.
Your vocals are really great.
They make this song very emotional.
The acoustic version is also very nice.
Enjoyed my listen a lot.

Best regards.

Shigeki Adachi

Outstanding passion in your voice, Deej. What a strong song, and I think the mix is flawless. So sorry to hear of your loss of your dad. That's tough, but the influence and love lasts a lifetime. SO glad you're back, and this is a wonderful gift you brought us.

Musically intriguing, and lyrically very cleverly composed.

I was quite entranced with the underlying rhythm that bonded everything perfectly.

IMHO the BiaB version is your best to date
IMHO so was the acoustic version

A paradox for sure as both are excellent on their own, totally different but equally fantastic

All I can say is keep up the outstanding work

Hi Deej56,

I like your voice which lends itself wonderfully to your musical instrumentation. This is a very well done composition. Excellent, I really apprecied it.


Kindly regard
Derochette
alias JaniJackFlash