Ray,

I really like the chord progression and the song itself. Great lyrics. This sounds like a worktape to me in terms of mix.

A lot of the stuff is in the same dynamic range and even has the same sound, so it is getting mushed. The backing track sounds muffled, and almost like one track--not a mix.

I would get the bass and drums sounding punchy and solid, then add in new guitars, as you say, that have totally different dynamic ranges to make the song more crisp. Maybe an electric AND an acoustic, or something.

Anyway, you are definitely off to a good start!!

David Snyder
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