Hi everyone,

This is my new Dutch song, Ik hou mijn adem in, https://soundcloud.com/user-296497130/ik-hou-mijn-adem-in

I was working on serious, 'heavy' lyrics, about war, destruction, greed and so on, but then got enough of that. Still I loved the melody, so kept that, skipped the lyrics and wrote a lovesong blush , well, kind of...

Writing in your native language isn't that easy. Even after I did a few Dutch songs it's still a complicated challenge. At least for me. i think of aspects like the language, the pronoucation and singing. It is not really my 'groove'. But that's why I make them occasionally.

I hope you like it, although you won't understand a word, I fear.
Therefore I included a translation. I'm not really convinced I used the correct words. If you have a better translation, let me know!
Beneath that you see the used instruments.
Let me know if you like it, or what I need to change, or whatever,

Edit: june 8: I changed the angle in the song, from 'her' to 'you'. I thought that was nicer. But a lot of work...

Hans

I'm holding my breath
(c) HWBerkhout, june 8,  NL/ Dutch

I walk down a long linden avenue
Bowed head, see no one standing
It is very hot today
I feel clammy and sweaty

I'm on my way to the cafe
just out of sentimentality
I hope to find something here
Preferably you, or beer again

Chorus
I'm shocked to see you
I hold my breath
Have you seen me too?
(Yes) I hold my breath

I can still see us as we were, then
Do you do this too, every now and then?
But then this came to an end
reducing 'Together' to 'Alone'

Chorus

=solo=

Chorus
I'm shocked when you see me
I hold my breath
Then you're shocked when see me staring
You hold your breath

But I liked a lot what I saw happening
I smile at you
You look at me inquisitively, then smile back
I breathe out...

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Style: GIDDY.STY, Key: Bm, tempo: 95 bpm

RealTracks in stijl: 903:Bass
RealTracks in song:2503:Piano, Ac.
RealTracks in stijl: 1581:Guitar, Ac
RealTracks in song: 3492:Guitar, Elec, Ska
RealTracks in song: 2535:Guitar, Elec
RealTracks in song: 685:Harmonica
RealTracks in song:3075: Fiddle
RealTracks in song:3247: Guitar, elec, solo
RealDrums: NashvilleSwing
Me: Vocals, bg vocals, keyboard (female vocals, Violin chops)



Last edited by Birchwood; 06/08/22 01:14 AM.
Hans Berkhout
(Birchwood)
https://soundcloud.com/user-296497130