Yea Torrey
This is a Good write from you as expected, You do suit stepping out of your norm , as I see it , great vocals but on the verses a bit dry ...wee bit more /add some reverb/excitement in the vocals/song as the artists do/done .

I always seen comments on this forum too much reverb, well a think that is the big diff of opinion, from live and recording , a sure as hell loved my studio recordings of the artists i bought on vinyl, cassette !! .

And that started that old ...here we go ..(They never sounded as good on record as they did in concert.). saying..!.

This is now ! and we are here !! Go for it !!.

Excellent lyrics A song a would revisit and try some plug ins Pssst !! Reverb .

Thanks

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